the monster in your head wrote you a poem

Look and see the monsters that be those of you who will not flee. 

For each there is three.

Help yourself and you'll be free from one and two.

But not from three for that title belongs to me.

for it is you and me and that's the way it shall always be. 

Author's Notes/Comments: 

This is just a short little poem about what someones inner demons might say. the demons are sadness and anger one and two but three is hope.plaese tell me what you think I could use the feed back. 

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SSmoothie's picture

A riddle me this about hope.

A riddle me this about hope. I like it! But no reference so the comment becomes criticalperhapsa hint in the title? Great idea. Well done!  Didn’t know hope was a demon? 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

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It’s cute the tilrle and the

It’s cute the tilrle and the work is a neat little package but the third monster is not obvious each has three?  9 monsters? No real anchor or theme except eluded to by the title. So the beginning is good the ending great but I get lost somewhere in the middle a little more help for the reader. doesn’t have to be obvious just a little more direction. Happy writing!  Blessingss ss 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

Wayne's picture

thanks I will mak sure to be

thanks I will make sure to be more clear I guess you could say next time