LOVE

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LOVE POEMS

  I am happy but tired I have good friends and I

    have whom I love and he has being there for me

   He picks me up when I am down he is my hero and

   we have a good time when we are together he is my

   strength he keeps me going he makes me laugh,

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I fake a smile just To hide my scars's picture

i like the poem, but the format of it could be written in a different way something like this:

I am happy but tired
I have good friends
and I have whom I love
and he has being there for me
He picks me up when I am down
he is my hero and
we have a good time
when we are together
he is my strength
he keeps me going
he makes me laugh,

writing it like that makes it more easier to comprehend. but it's still a good poem and it's up to you whether or not you change it. if you like the way it's written then you should keep it that way.

lovebeinginlov3's picture

Not sure if it's a true story 4u, but im a sucker 4love. =} Beautifully writen. It's a wonderful thing to be loved whether it's by a spouse, a child, or just a dear friend. Keep writing those feelings & sharing them.


~perfect love~