THE WALL

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LOSING LOVE

Their wedding picture mocked them from the table,

These two whose minds no longer touched each other,

They lived with such a heavy barricade between them,

That neither battering ram of words,

Nor artilleries of touch could break it down,

Somewhere between the oldest child"s first tooth

And the youngest daughter"s graduation, They lost each other.

Throughout the years each slowly unravled that tangled ball of string called self, And as they tugged at stubborn knots, each hid his searching from the other, Sometimes she cried at night and begged the whispering darkness to tell her who she was, He lay beside her, snoreing like hibernating bear, Unaware of her winter, Once after they had made love,He wanted  to  tell her how afraid he was of dying,but fearing to show his naked soul he spoke instead about the beauty of her breasts.She took a course in mordern art, Trying to find herself in colors splashed upon canvas, Complaining to other women about men who are insensetive. He climbed into a tomb called the office, wrapped his mind in a shroud of paper figures, and buried himself in customers. Slowly, the wall between them rose, Cemneted by the mortar of indifference, One day reaching out to touch each other they found a barrier they could not penetrate and recoiling from the coldness of the stone, each retreated from the stranger on the other side, For when love dies, it is not in a moment of angry battle, nor when fiery bodies lose heat. It lies panting, exhausted, Expiring at the bottom of a wall it could not scale,

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deepinyourdreams's picture

Wow! I loved the writeing. The Wall is a nice peice.
It is so true the many good writes come from pain.
Nope you write more...hope they all are not sad.
Barry Anderson


"Deepinyourdreams"

Corie Lynn M.'s picture

Damn girl this is absolutely fantastic!!
The imagery leaves me speechless.
Remarkable work!

Rachel Nicole's picture

that was beautiful keep writing

Tim / manatee Marshall's picture

AAA+++ GETS MY HIGHEST TEAKE (WIDI) WISH I DID IT
VERY POWERFULALWAYS TELL IT HOW IT IS OK L&PEACE
THANKS

Danniel Lennax's picture

WOW!!!!!!!!!!

This was explosive! Very well written and expressed. I loved it...love it!

Thank you for critiquing one of my works,I appreciate the feedback.

Keep up the writing.You are very good.

A New Friend,

Danniel J. Lennax

Rebecca Moyers's picture

Very well written but so sad this happens to so many couples but you said it beautifully.

9inety's picture

This is a great poem. Many of the images are universal to much of modern day relationships. Keep a positive view, God Bless


"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"

Dylan Eliot

babe1233's picture

wow this is beautifully-amazing you are so amazing and a wonderful writer, and these are a few of many reason's o will never get married and why i'm so terrified of love, I hope one day my poems touch people the way your work touched my heart