Melodies XLIX; A Poem After Bierce's Tales

When you had first read that coy epigraph---

there carved upon an ancient, massive stone---

you had admired the few lines' artistry.

The words spoke like some zany comedy

and brought your troubled mind a brief, loud laugh

that broke your usual stern, and somber mood

but soon replaced it with a ghastly sense

like the gray sky above, leaden with gloom,

a shock coming upon you stealthily,

bringing a gasp that failed to draw a breath;

your thoughts reel, as the rest of you grows tense

the small poem is---really---an epitaph.

And, to your now distending eyeballs shown,

is your name, and your dates of birth and death.

Here, they whom you once hated had interred

your carcass long ago and rather far

from passing glances of society

(on this, they, all, agreed, and all concurred:

(they who despised you as uncouth and crude---

all your inferiors, so went your boast).

Unvisited, shunned, and unmourned, this tomb---

on this waste plain (sparse scrub, one lifeless tree)

beneath clouds that obscure the brightest star---

is all that you were and that you still are.

You know, now, not to hope this is some dream;

you know that no one, now, will hear your scream;

none, even, who believe that you could be

a lingering, unhinged, reprobate ghost,

haunting your self; and, still, wholly alone.

 

Starward

 

Author's Notes/Comments: 

This was inspired by Ambrose Bierce's excellently frightening tale, "An Inhabitant Of Carcossa."

 

 

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patriciajj's picture

Your reboot of the classic

Your reboot of the classic tale has its own intriguing, cleverly frightful and swift-paced personality. The first lines are a sly and atmospheric hook before the story pivots into a "shock coming upon you stealthily" and from there the dramatic question, delivered in your vibrant, epic style looms large and inescapable. 

 

As soon as we're wrapping our heads around the reality of the situation, you add some intense psychological drama: the characters' enemies,  his inferiors, were the ones that interred him long ago and now he must come to grips with being "unvisited, shunned and unmourned" in a brooding landscape (powerfully sketched, by the way) where he haunts himself "and still, wholly alone". (Amazing!) 

 

Using a second person point of view draws the reader intimately into the event and for this type of condensed and elegant thriller it works beautifully in my opinion. 

 

The combination of wit and classic horror was also a recipe for pure enjoyment. 

 

Success! 

 

 

S74rw4rd's picture

Thank you so much for the

Thank you so much for the reading and the comment.  I was a bit nervous about this one.  But your comment leads me to think that another, similar poem (a ghost story with another twist, or twisted, ending) might be worth assembling.  Thanks again for the mentorship.


Starward

patriciajj's picture

Ghost story with a new twist

Ghost story with a new twist in your style. A must read! 

S74rw4rd's picture

Thank you for that

Thank you for that encouragement!


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