In the spaces between love and hate.

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Soulmates II

Which thousandth time is this,
that  my heart and soul cry out to you?
You have knocked my world senseless yet again.
rendered me incapable, unreachable, unlovable.
I am in the space between life, death and dreams
where I can sit next to you all I want and feel home.
The rage, quietened by our tenderness,
our tenderness stoked by our synergies aligning
The shape and shadows of our love fall on the wall,
a four armed hypnotic cobra,
two twined into one
an intrinsic vibration,
a holy peace to transcend all eternity;
I could spend forever here...
-If I wasn't so captivated by his seductive hell.

 

 

 

 

 

which thousandth time is this, that  my heart and soul cry out to you?

You have knocked my world senseless yet again.

rendered me incapable, unreachable,unlovable.

I am in the space between life, death and dreams,

where I can sit next to you all i want and feel home.

The rage quietened by our tenderness

our tenderness stoked by our synergies.

The shape and shadows of our love falls on the wall;

a four armed hypnotic cobra,

two twined into one.

An intrinsic peace to transcend all eternity,

I could spend forever here...

If I wasn't so captivated by his seductive hell.

 

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Almost FINAL EDIT!

Almost FINAL EDIT! THOUGHTS???


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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Honestly, I like the original

Honestly, I like the original a tad bit more.
It's raw.
Profound.
un-tampered.

Passionate.
Straight up soul juice.

A flux I cannot help but adhere to.

A beautiful moment that just happens.

There's my Two cents anyway.

"If it aint broke, don't fix it"

 

 


"The stars awaken a certain reverence, because though always present, they are inaccessible; but all natural objects make a kindred impression, when the mind is open to their influence." R.W.E.

 


 

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you know what, I totally

you know what, I totally agree. My style is raw. open and thought or theme provoking. so yeah this isnt the first time I have had a response like that. so lesson learned! hugss


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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There is an entire galaxy

There is an entire galaxy bearing stars from your words,
Somewhere out there, you know?
Such precision through the brackish.
You are a delicacy my dear.
Phenomenal as usual.


"The stars awaken a certain reverence, because though always present, they are inaccessible; but all natural objects make a kindred impression, when the mind is open to their influence." R.W.E.

 


 

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aww shucks! now what do you

aww shucks! now what do you say to that???? except *blush! ;) so good to see you back on, So what precious pearls of poetry will you pluck from the heavens for us? hugss


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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In due time I'm sure

In due time I'm sure of.

Taking a break from writing and sharing for a spell.

I may post a piece soon that has been clawing at my mind for weeks.

Who knows though, I am content with reading and occasionally commenting these days.

 


"The stars awaken a certain reverence, because though always present, they are inaccessible; but all natural objects make a kindred impression, when the mind is open to their influence." R.W.E.