heads or tails?

never one for pulling tails,
as long as I can remember
There has always been you; and you
you feel like home;
and you feel like adventure.
you make me safe;
and you make me excited.
you make me accountable;
and you set me free.
you need me;
and you want me.
you love me passonately deeply;
and you love me deeply passionately;
and I can not bare to choose,
which one of you to lose.
My head in my hands.

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Adam아담's picture

Oh, nice! I like what you did

Oh, nice! I like what you did with the first couple lines, thats really good...

... and this is really good:

"There has always been you; and you
you feel like home;
and you feel like adventure.
you make me safe;
and you make me excited.
you make me accountable;
and you set me free.
you need me;
and you want me."

... all that was so fresh, human, and personal. Haven't seen anyone's words paint a picture like that ever, exactly. Its quite unique.


Cheers,
Adam_San

Adam아담's picture

As a matter of fact... I'm

As a matter of fact... I'm saving this poem on my computer to remember it - is that okay?


Cheers,
Adam_San

SSmoothie's picture

Most definately you can!

Most definately you can! cheers Adam! Thank you so much for really taking the time ;)


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

kerry's picture

Fine Poem

Well written, compelling. Try to keep both - it can be done if love is strong enough.

SSmoothie's picture

Yes because love is unconditional

Andi have always loved and never un loved anybody your heart is big enough and your honor strong enough to cope and your faith strong enough to resist sometimes loves a quiet whisper on the wind and that is enough, and some times it isn't ;) thanks kerry! Cheers SS


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am