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Circles around circles 


We never seem to touch in the right place

Where we'd meet at an intersection; 

where thoughts can over lap

and ideas spring to life! 


And yet a life is what we've built 

Circling like hawks picking eachothers bones 

And anything else of use to feather our nest 


Everything inevitably falls apart 

Crashing down all around us 


Except us 


and we don't have much in common 

Except our calamaties

And our never ending eddies 


I guess we've managed to come full circle 

More than few times 

Dizzy as a spun dime 


and yet here we are 

at our throats as much as in our hearts 

We seem to always over come 


can't stay, can't go 

say yes , say no 

No doubt

I don't know 


 

You figure it out 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Draft- 

Circles around circles 

We never seem to touch in the right place

where we'd meet at an intersection 

where thoughts can over lap 

and ideas spring to life 

And yet a life is what we've built 

Circling like hawks picking eachothers bones 

And anything of use

to feather our nest 

Everything inevitably falls apart 

Crashing down all around us 

Except us 

and we don't have much in common 

Except our calamaties

And our never ending eddies 

I guess we've managed to come full circle 

More than few times 

Dizzy as a spun dime 

and yet here we are 

at our throats as much as in our hearts 

We seem to always over come 

can't stay, can't go 

say yes , say no 

No doubt

I don't know 

You figure it out 

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Beavis's picture

Wow!!!

I haven't been on much lately, but this is amazing! Your writing has advanced soooo much! It was alway great, but you are in the stratosphere now Excellent write!!!

SSmoothie's picture

I am so honoured you have

I am so honoured you have spent some time in Ssmoothieland! And so excited and overjoyed at your comment! I swear sometimes I write just to impress you. I will never forget the influence you have has on me as a writer, an observer of truth, perception or thought. What a glorious day! I haven't much time and sporadically do something here and there i don't refine often, I just pour it out on the page and share it with the universe, better out than in... a coping mechanism i can only write on my phone can't type much anymore due to an injury... rehab is a blinder of a thing! Never ready for it. But at least I have some avenue and maybe some audience who will make of it what they will. I just wish I had more refind stuff... maybe I should add a code to differentiate from my rambling thought bubbles and save more than a few from certain shock or boredom!  ha ha ha  So happy you dripped by the world is feeling much righter and brighter today! Thank you, my PostPoem legend!


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

patriciajj's picture

"and yet here we are at our

"and yet here we are

at our throats as much as in our hearts"

 

Word Empress, you did it again!

 

With dazzling acumen, rare awareness and burrowing insight, you unearthed so much about the dichotomy, the conundrum, the crazy-making complications and unspeakable treasures of our human connections. I love the laser-sharp resignation at the end: a realization that the exasperating, ever-changing scrollwork of humanity just is what it is.  "You figure it out" Love it! 

 

So much perspective, gorgeously unveiled.

 
SSmoothie's picture

How i look forward to you

How i look forward to you wonderful insights. The heat and soul of posrpoems lives in and through you 

Your comments prompted me to tidy it up a bit and give it the form it deserves. Nothing as careful and thought out as your exquisite poetic journeys that are somehow perfunctory feeling - just so right. I wish I had the discipline to go where you go instead of just catching random ideas in the pixels of light hoping they will live on and one day ill create an anthology of the goodness bits or even write the ultimate poem... that its standard will meet yours... thank you so much. With much appreciation and delight. Hugs ss


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

patriciajj's picture

I love where you went with

I love where you went with this!

 

The first draft was enthrallingly beautiful, but after a bit of polishing, some white space and sonorous pacing to provide breathing room for your little bursts of brilliance, or "pixels of light" as you superbly called them, and an engaging cadence to carry your perceptions to a striking conclusion, I can only say: amazing!

 

Never doubt your innate gift and your extraordinary value here.  

 

I'm deeply moved and humbled by your very supportive words. Brightest blessings.

 
S74rw4rd's picture

This poem is very wise, and

This poem is very wise, and it tells me that you a shrewd observer of human nature and the human predicament.


Starward

SSmoothie's picture

Thank you my learned and wise

Thank you my learned and wise friend, you are always appreciated. You have become the stellar torch lighting the  anchor looking starward on befits the hand over of the soul of Post Poems and Postpomies everywhere 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

S74rw4rd's picture

Thank you so much for those

Thank you so much for those very kind words.


Starward