Happy Birthday to your God complex

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I want to make you as lonely as me

As hurt

In pain

Sad

Worthless

I want company in my misery and I’ll get it the only way I know how

By force

With guilt

Against love

Because lets face it

If I gave you free will

You’d chose to walk away

 

And I’d finally feel true pain

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SSmoothie's picture

And this one is a great one

And this one is a great one too!


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

SSmoothie's picture

True pain... An infinite or

True pain... An infinite or finite concept...? True pain. Nothing but suffering in this piece. An eye opener to the subconscious mechanisms that we swear seems so logical at the time... Survival mode is one very complicated idea...?!! Nice piece the ending seems a little off for your usual greatness. There's something I can't put my finger on But something doesn't sit right. It's like my drafts great bit then there's that off word line or structure somewhere  in there. Hugss 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

running_with_rabbits's picture

:) HUGS!

God Smoothie I am so glad its not just me, I sat there for over an hour hating that ending and not wnating to post it because the ending sucked, but caved and posted it, whats with it who knows but it sits like Hitler at a Bar Mitzvah against the rest of the poem eh?


Much Love

Ashley

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Lol! No, um yes? Um ahhhh!

Lol! No, um yes? Um ahhhh! .????? It very beavis-esque with the ending so it's good just in a different un wabbity way. If catch my drift? I think I've got a few suggestions but, Id be happy with it as is because it is so right but so different. Hugss 


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's life SIMS, but not as we know it" - ¡$&am

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pm me your suggestions love :)


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Ashley

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hi.

hi. this is a sad poem. i'm sorry that you're so sad and depressed. i hope you find things to be thankful for, count your blessings, realize how much we all care about you, and no one's going to leave you alone to crumble. You're never alone and just because you're miserable doesn't mean no one can cheer you up. We don't all have to be miserable. Anyway, it's a well written poem.

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:)

oh eyes my dear you are so lovely! I just adore you! I promise I am not the voice in this poem just the one behind the pen, it is written from another's perspective :) HUGS should I ever be feeling this level of pain, I also promise you will get a pm and we can chat it out :) keep being awesome


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Ashley

cevance's picture

Very intense.  Emotions

Very intense.  Emotions stretched to the limits, like a rubber band ready to snap. Makes me shudder to think about it.

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:) thanks for the read :)

:) thanks for the read :)


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Ashley

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Ooooh! I forgot to mention--I

Ooooh! I forgot to mention--I liked it.

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:)

I gathered my dear :)


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Ashley

nightlight1220's picture

This brings such compassion

This brings such compassion for both people. Wow. It's hard to tell if the writer has the god complex or someone else. But it's "rivetting". I never understood those types of relationships. I think sometimes we attract what we need. If we need to be more understanding, we attract things we have no understanding of. Would love to be able to understand people who stay in relationships with people who always want to hirt them....but I don't want to have one of those relationships to learn!! Lol.

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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

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:)

understanding is tricky for sure! I am really glad that you were able to find compassion for both people, I think the world could use more compassion and less side taking :)

 

I also agree that we attract what we need. Everything has a value if you let it have one. I don't think you need to expierence something to understadn it, nor do I think one understands once expierenced, I think understanding comes only from gathering information and applying critical thinking,and even then our understanding of soemthing is limited by our perceptions. :)

 

thanks for the read night

 


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Ashley

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Oh rabbit, you spoke some

Oh rabbit, you spoke some fine words there. Critical thinking---- so key and seemingly so "taboo" in our religiously run so ciety. "God " forbid, right?? Yes. I do my best, as I carry with me, some extra large feet that often wind up in my mouth when I don't stop and remember the many holes chipped away in my walls through my own need for survival exactly for that purpose. Again, the poem is beautifully raw and rivetting. I loved it. Hit me like a "ringed fist".... (that once  many moons ago, left a scar beneath my left eye...lmao...truth!).


...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

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:(

that is a sad true story... I am sorry my poem felt like that fist... I promise you it wanted to feel like a hug :)


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Ashley

nightlight1220's picture

Aww...that is sweet of you,

Aww...that is sweet of you, but don't fret...as such memories are those that keep me green, grateful, and the humility we all need sometimes. I wear them like I would an ugly old sweater from a cherished grandma-ma!!! :-)

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...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

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<3

AMEN!


Much Love

Ashley