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Old Poems Look up, look up, don't look at the ground
your soul may have been lost but now it's been found
keep looking forward keep your eyes straight ahead
there's no going back to the past that you dread
Look up, look up, stop facing the floor
what a terrible view for those eyes I adore
who cares if they whisper?
who cares what they say?
your nobody's slave leave those chains where they lay
who cares if there laughing?
who cares if they stare?
you know your friends love you and will always be there
Look up, look up, keep your eyes off the Mat
you and I both know your better than that
just keep moving forward, it will all be okay
don't be concerned with the games people play
the world can be hateful and it can be cruel
but keep looking up and the world you will rule
look into a mirror and what do you see?
a beautiful angel who deserves to be free
free from the torment, free from the tears
free from the suffering endured all of these years
Look up, strait up, away from the floor
you don't have to be turning there wheel anymore
you've been through so much, and you've suffered great falls
you've been trapped in there Prison without any walls
but your nobodies prisoner, you've done nothing wrong
so step out of your Armour and hear the Earth's song
so look up, yes straight up, and gaze at the sky
the stars will be yours, I'll teach you to fly
Hi Robbie! This is Erin (yah know, the one with the hair, the eyes... and the clarinet 8P). I've told you before how much I enjoy your writing, particularly your uncanny sense of rhythm/rhyme. This poem is no exception. It flows beautifully, with the universal moral engaging every person in some unique way. I mean, who hasn't had their eyes on the floor at some point in their lives? I just have one question for you: do you want any gramatical/spelling suggestions? You obviously write from the heart, and convey your feelings very adeptly... I don't want to mess with that. Please let me know.
Anyway, please feel free to check out my writing (it's in chaos right now, I'm reorganizing). I'd really appreciate any suggestions you might have (maybe you can help me with my rhyme/rhythm 'cause mine sucks! 8S). Thank you for sharing your poetry. I'll be back to read some more...
Robbie....great poem ...thoughtful ...good flow and rythem .....thankyou for sharing .....Lorraine :)
The only line I don't like is "you don't have to be turning there wheel anymore" but other then that I like it all! :) I don't believe there to be any spelling...but I might have missed them..I doubt it...Nice :) love ya always Vicki
Hi Robbie....it's been some time since i leave some words behind eh?~!...Still, i have been following your postings..Smilesz, keep it up~! I like the meaningful words u penned for this...and the sort-of revelation to let go and go forth. It can be so hard to help someone, more so when he/she has closed the doors to their hearts huh?~ Thanxs for sharing this event in your life, Robbie..... all the best to u, and take care~!