unfinished in udder confusion

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Unfinished Manor, Udder Confusion


The manor rises,
half‑brick, half‑breath,
scaffolds leaning like drunk giraffes
in a ballroom of invoices.

 

Builders moo in helmets,
their blueprints dripping milk,
an udder confusion splattering
onto ledgers already swollen.

 

The chandelier is a receipt,
swinging from the rafters,
each crystal a decimal point
falling into the contractor’s pocket.

 

Overbudget becomes a hymn,
sung in jackhammer staccato,
while the stairwell halts mid‑air,
a promise of ascent
that never quite lands.

 

The walls argue with the ceilings,
the ceilings collapse into the floors,
and the floors whisper:
“We were never meant to be finished.”


Outside, the accountants
plant orange cones in the garden,
watering them with IOUs.

 

Inside, the builders
count their hours backwards,
measuring progress in sighs,
while the manor itself

laughs in unfinishedness,
a monument to expense,
forever almost,
forever not.

 

 

 

 

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elliot_jordan2003's picture

Very creative

Such a great metaphor of imagery and sacrifice. Plant orange cones and watering them with IOUs sounds like broken promises. 

redbrick's picture

Many thanks, Jordan! So much

Many thanks, Jordan! So much brokenness around us and in our lives it could be presumed as well. Most appreciated Smile


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