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Seventeen Words


Autumn leaves scatter,
a bearded man bends to paper,
midnight train departs,
dreams dissolve,
winter silence gathers.

 

 

 

 

Author's Notes/Comments: 

...instead of 17-syllables. An extension.

 

Autumn train departs—
fallen leaves scatter like words,
wind carries regret.

 

 

 

 

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Excellent in both versions.

Excellent in both versions.


Starward-Led [in Chrismation, Januarius]

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Many thanks, Starward-Led.

Many thanks, Starward-Led. Means a whole lot here.


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