Can you taste the commotion?

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Oh, people in the pizzeria,

Pests among the pepperoni

Particles. Oh what a night,

It feels far from right here

When everything around

Is festering with strife dear!

 

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arqios's picture

That captures that current

That captures that current state of being where it is quite deflating to find a pleasurable out on the town moment.


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Reminds me of a past hobo

Reminds me of a past hobo friend of mine who did the robot in mockery of those townspeople passing by.


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arqios's picture

oh that is quite an exercise

oh that is quite an exercise in imagery! This reminds me of that guy who did Superman on the streets of Hollywood and now also the Joker which also had a drawing on the human and societal psyche that extends further from the imagination and the silver screen.


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I'm there and I'm feeling it.

I'm there and I'm feeling it. You did an expert job creating a frantic, claustrophobic and hostile atmosphere that reflects the inner discord of the diners. A highly significant poem that has the impact of postmodernist art. Brilliant title as well. 

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Yeah, now I'm just tryna

Yeah, now I'm just tryna catch a break from the scene, before being shoved right back in those bloodsuckers! :)


bananas are the perfect food

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