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A DAUGHTER TO HER MOM
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About the Writer The bond that we have
are often intertwined
I do what you hate
because there’s nothing I do
that you wouldn’t hate
everything I say
you always contradict
because there’s nothing I say
that you wouldn’t contradict
You’re always on guard
as though I’m constantly at fault
You always say
“do this and not that”
as though I can’t go on my own
Sometimes I wonder
why we must live together
only to see each other
going against each other
When are you gonna learn the ways of today?
You had your chance
Now let me deal with mine
You were once like me
Why can’t you understand me
You’ve explored the world
Why can’t I do the same?
How can I learn the ways of the world
When you don’t trust me to mend my own
You’ve given me little space to breathe
fenced my border with all your austere policies
it is eating me, can’t you see?
You gave me life
let me use it wisely
not according to your judgement
but according to my own
yesterday was yours
and now is mine
let me handle this
and you’ll see
You’re not wrong in letting me be
And I promise to make you proud of me
Hi LL
I like the honesty in your poem. You wrote how you felt.
That is the freedom that we have. I am so sorry it was like that. I can remember when my Mama would say.
"Don't do this or that". I would say."But Mama why" and she would tell me. I did not always agree with her, but
I believe she knew best. Some may not always know best
who are we to say.
I accepted that. I am so glad she did. I had the most wonderful Mama in the world.
I don't know how old you are but maybe one day you will see it all as a learning experience.
In the meantime, keep up the writing.
Love and prayers
Gilda / COffee2
love can become a stumbling block to understanding. your mum
does not want you to fall into the same trap that she has fallen
and i think that's why she is behaving so. your mum really loves
you so much. sometimes, i really hope that there is someone out
there to guide me because i had fallen so many times. enjoy your
life - thank god that you still have a caring mother to nag. do send
me your poems whenever you have a new one posted. thanks for your
critique of my haikus. bye and cheers.
Nice poem. I like it. :-)
i really love this poem, it is excellent well done and keep up the good work.
I can truly appeciate this poem as Yesterday
my daughter said, I wrote you somthing
and gave me this poem:
Debt
I owe the love I never gave
I owe the truth I never told
I owe the hugs you didn't have
but most of all I owe my life!
This last line didnt rhyme but yet it was perfect
because it was the best compliment a Father can receive.
Somtimes one can say more with a poem than one can with a direct statment. Keep the love flowing... Keep the words going...
"Mother's knows best! right?" But sometimes mom's doesnt know that u can't breathe anymore because of so much do's and don'ts, because of so much policies. The only thing to do is for you to tell her what you really feel. Be open to your mom. How can she understand you if you dont tell her what's on your mind and heart? Nobody in this world u will listen to you and understand you is only ur mom.
ok, this poem pisses me off. it starts off so well. keeping a constant beat with the you hate, you woudln't hate, contridict, wouldn't contridict, but then you start to lose all ryhtme (pardon my spelling, FL education, what can i say). and that disappoints me. sure i can sense the emotion of this poem, so it does make me feel something. but it doesn't carry me away to a new world. it's good, makes a lot of good points, but no rythm, no way to feel it, or sway with it. and belle's got a point, maybe your mother's "been there done that, why should my daughter waste her life finding out what I already know. life is short" sort of person, and you're not seeing that. but like i said, it started out well. i say just tweak it a little and it'll be boss, cuz what it's saying is good.
Bitch
Amazing poem! I especially liked the positive message at the end.
Hi Lola, Thanks for allowing me to share in your relationship with your mother. I never had a mother so I guess I look for that which I've been missing. Anyway, it's nice of you to share your feelings and thoughts in this way. Thank you for being YOU. You're appreciated. That Happy Chica :) Marcia Ellen
So, mothers sometimes don't know what's best for us, eh? This sounds like a defiant daughter, hehehe. Anyways, I like your rationale. It's just relative. I love this poem, great job. ^_^