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You saw I couldn't bear it
Yet you didn't stop
Like a greedy newborn
Sucking every drip drop
of my essence
Making me your
Desert oasis
Your breeding ground
And I surrendered
Surrendered my feelings
Severing my pride
For a chance to change you
Sex does not equal love
1989? damn girl...you're jive deep to be so young. This was really good.
You have a very unique writing style and I love it. You get your point across while playing with the readers emotions as you go along without knowing what's coming next or what emotion will be displayed. I especially like the image of him sucking you like a newborn. It was such a vivid image for me and I could really relate to it. I really thought you wrapped it up nicely when you said that sex doesn't equal love. It's a shame more people don't realize this and the predators out there pounce on it. I hope that you continue writing to express yourself because you are very talented and you can go far with it.
I could hear this as a song...you have a refreshing style