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Sucked Up In This Social Whirl Pool
4 yearz....
I been beat-in & bruized with black & blue woundz
I sit under poetry an unbrella keeping me safe from rain
I can't hang with society'z dramaz
I stay soaked in silk sheetz & coverz melting my pillows of Tears of fire
I exploaded Inside
Like flammable lighter fluid gone unsupervised
Like a fragile tigers paw trapped & miserable
Darknezz consumed my soul
I'm like a new born baby wrapped in depression
Like its mama'z womb, its comfort is all I knew
Like an alcholic going through withdrawl
I blacked out
I wanna be free like a bird 4 everyone 2 see
No one seez my broken wingz
Dripping blood from my heart everytime I see another wretched Soul
Its like eating poisoned snow
I'm missing
I can't be found because
I'm sucked up in this social whirl pool
Wow! These similes and metaphors are the highlight of this piece. All of those artistic fragmentation formed a nice scene of visual descriptions. What a deep way to describe the true feelings of your heart! I loved that ending too. It was a nice way to close off your message. Good job and may GOD continue to bless you forever! Peace!
i still like this one too...i liked how u used similies in this one