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Freestyle Of Pain
I'm trying...
Trying too express beautifully
Its hard though apart of me lost hope
My soul feels ugly inside
The pains stomped on my emotions
behind its left wounded footsteps
My back burns
Nothings left but lingering burdens
My eyes are deep skies
Its clouds are bruised waterfalls
Tears are fallen like raindrops
I'm discombobulated
I don't know what too do
This lingering pain is making me ill
My heart real yet its beats feel like thumps
of numbness
I'm paralyzed from feeling love
My sights been stolen
I can't see clearly
I'm lost
Blinded by life's unpredictable path
I'm trying too find myself outta this misery
I'm missing her like crazy
I'm tired of being strong
My wounds are bleeding me weak
I'm gonna faint
Stop me from fallen..Don't leave me
I don't want your fucking sympathy
I don't need you telling me too forget her
She's my first born
She's my gold without her I'm lost & poor
I'm tired of being strong
My hope's existence is saying so long
Honestly, your words often induce a pain inside of me that is so deeply burried and unvoiced. I admire you for being able to write like this. I find my words to be often violently screaming at first, but then i temper them down like i am ashamed of them. You have the ability to express even pain beautifuly, but i dont think you know this..I have read (although not commented on i admit..) most of the things you have posted and the one impression i am always left with is "this girl is real, hurts real, like me. but she's not so afraid to admit it" I really do admire your work. ~Rae
"Every time i say something they dont want to hear, they chalk it up to my anger and never their own fear" ~Ani Defranco
Wow! ..."The pains stomped on my emotions
behind its left wounded footsteps
My back burns
Nothings left but lingering burdens
My eyes are deep skies
Its clouds are bruised waterfalls
Tears are fallen like raindrops
I'm discombobulated
I don't know what too do
This lingering pain is making me ill
My heart real yet its beats feel like thumbs
of numbness
I'm paralyzed from feeling love"...
Whoa! The similes, metaphors and descriptive displays of imagery really took this piece unto another level deep in course of my imagination. Wow! There's no one better I think when it comes to describing emotions than you! Good job and may GOD continue to bless you forever! Peace!
Wonderfuly stated. Great job on this one.~Rae