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Rock Bottom/Best Intent
You gave it all away
with best intent I heard you say
and while your broken on the floor
your wondering if there's something more
then this stupid burnout life
that only serves us pain and strife
but this isn't something new
your screwed no matter what you do.
Hit rock bottom, fade away
save this for another day
sit yourself back and watch you suffer
take this concept or the other
neither preffered, what can you do
I guess this isn't nothing new
where are you going on from here
do you have guts, or is it fear
not like it really matters now
you think you'll fix this mess somehow.
But you are lost and this is done
and in the end noone has won
didn't have to be this way
until you gave it all away.
Okay, reading all your poetry.. it sounds like EVERY poem you write is about one of those guys. Whether it be this Hartley guy whom I don't know or.. um.. okay, that's the only one I know. But it seems like EVERY single poem is about them, and it gets quite old. Granted, you have the cool lines every once in a while, but all in all it's the same thing over and over. Not that I'm one to complain, my poems ain't on opposite ends of the spectrum, but.. maybe you could write about macaroons or something. Just.. something else. Without sounding preachy, of course.
wow
"You gave it all away
with best intent I heard you say
and while your broken on the floor
your wondering if there's something more
then this stupid burnout life
that only serves us pain and strife"
and this part
"but this isn't something new
your screwed no matter what you do.
Hit rock bottom, fade away
save this for another day"
nikki that was great oh and the end!
"But you are lost and this is done
and in the end noone has won
didn't have to be this way
until you gave it all away."
i love it the other parts i didn't list are kinda choppi but these make up for it
may i ask what its about?
ash
Much Love
Ashley