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Scars of an Unbroken Silence
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2008
One drink, two drink-
This party’s fine
Three drink, four drink-
A grand ole time
One by one,
And two by two
I drank them all
Who could'a knew?
Just lay down
I’m so tired now
Who would’ve known
The evil they’d allow
One kiss, two kiss-
I feel his breath
Three kiss, four kiss-
His lips are wet
Is it a dream?
I hope and wish
But it’s a nightmare
And I can’t do shit
I feel my head,
It’s hitting something
And then he’s inside
I can feel him sing
One tear, two tear-
But he doesn’t see
Three tear, four tear
I beg silently
Why can’t I move?
Why can’t I shout?
Will it ever stop?
This I doubt
I pass back out
For my own sanity
Wake up, wake up!
Now he’s shaking me
One step, two step-
Must get away
Three step, four step-
I didn’t want to play
My innocence he took
Something I can never mend
The scars he left
I can never tend
Still I try
To be so brave
And yet I live life
Always afraid
One life, two life-
They will destroy
Three life, four life-
They think we’re all toys
They never stop
Again and again
They think it’s a game
That has no end
So if you hear
Or if you see
Next time think twice
And speak out for me
I like this poem very much and idea is really rich and inspiring...its mature theme..which shows that you have much ability to write more and more poems...god bless you junior fried and thanks for your comments if you do to mine too.... sure I will be your friend and we discuss ideas.. hope you keep my famous say with you and to pass on to your friends ..ei ((( a friendly smile is the best weapon of war to fight with... afzal shauq))) hope never stop writing and comments too...looking foraiwrd for your sweet words ro hear and see..
Thank you for your critique on my poem, it was much appreciated. As for yours, I think it speaks for itself. You wrote about such a deep and delicate situation in such a way that really told the story with such emotion that I could feel it. I personally would keep 'Broken Silence' in the title, but I'd add something about Innocence and maybe Scars. That's just me, though. Keep on writing more, you're good!
Written by: Joel