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Your Haiku are brilliant! But this one seems to make too large a leap between the second and third lines. The light is extinguished, but then morning brings rebirth. I understand the logical progression, but I think Haiku's philosophy of the present moment would bring us, instead, to something more descriptive of night (because the light has been extinguished). Like "night will yield rebirth" or, "night prepares rebirth." As your humble reader, I simply suggest a smaller leap between the second and third lines.