Broken linguistics

We talk with the silence that mends
our eyes meet - should i just stutter
your violent sweetness devours my stature

With this creation, the diving intervention
slickest flings are mentioned with unjust intentions
tell me now how could you,
you weren't a dream, neither you be sure

the brief second consisted a lifespan of hope
creating a fantasy that leads a smoke of dope
i'll sing you something new if you'd like,
please make this second worthwhile

The end comes and the end passes by
the end is then remembered, bitterly yet hopeful
i should have given it a thousand more tries
but make a move now, live with no regretting fools

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SSmoothie's picture

hey this has brilliance

hey this has brilliance hinting all through it! a few tidy ups and BAM! its gonna shine like the winner it is. A thousand more tries... I love that line! Great write! Cheers SS


Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS    

"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."

blithe's picture

Thank you for the

Thank you for the appreciation