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I'll Survive
The anger only builds, I swear that I have already died
Because I feel like I'm stuck in hell, all I want to do is hide
I am a scared, emotional wreak, negativity will not subside
You think I've given up on life? It's only true that I've tried
It may not be the best life to live, but at least I'm getting by
Sometimes I don't know what to do so I avoid it with a lie
Don't act like you care now, 'cause before you never replied to my cries
Ignoring you comes natural, I don't even have to try.
I like the ending of the two
I like the ending of the two stanzas (using the tried, very clever). It was kind of abrupt how you put a subject or focus in the last two lines. Maybe incorporate it somehow in the beginning so it flows better! Just a friendly suggestion. Overall its a good piece though!
Looking back at it, I agree
Looking back at it, I agree with your critique. I was mad at someone when I made this a while ago and it was rushed, so definitely not my best piece.
It's all good, I write
It's all good, I write angrily sometimes and I rarely look back until someone points it out. I like to critique people's work to make them a better writer and make better poems :) If you need me to do anymore let me know! Honestly its a good one, may not be your best but don't sell it short.