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Turn Before the Sun
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Hyacinth garden
How beautiful the view from the outside looking in?
How glad I am to be alive to-day where do I begin?
Spectators to magnificence like needful sunflowers turn before the sun.
The sights and sounds as my senses take control and then freely run.
The red roses petals colored from my heart's blood.
My joyousness gushes forth in an uncontrollable flood.
This spectacular shine of fair golden and blue sky.
No enhanced work of genius could better benefit my eye.
Bouquets of sassafras and lilac drum upon the marvelous air.
No words can illustrate the feeling and nothing can compare.
Outside with natures richness admiring these fortunes all day long.
The apple orchards seem delighted by cheerful robin's song.
This bountiful beauty is more like secrets beating in a lover's breast.
All incomparable exquisiteness at this moment sun setting in the west.
Mother Earth reveals her mysteries with the natural view of its grace.
Enabling spontaneous smiles an addiction to my ever grateful face.
Nice imagery
Although each line paints a lovely picture in my head, the lines are long and seem to run on. I would add some punctuation to slow the flow and make it an easier read. You also forgot some apostrophes where they should be. Other than that, clever rhymes and beautiful images. Nicely penned!
i guess i need an
editor
peace
Dylan
"One of the best results of life, is the torment of love"
Dylan Eliot
Another wonderful piece you
Another wonderful piece you just shut me up no more rants :) I just want to write nice poetry! For a while! Cheers SS
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
What I like most about your verse are your words that wind there way around the dictionary with acute sharpness. You have a fine command of the english language and that I really enjoy. Grreat images and an obvious love of nature and an understanding of it's oneness with humanity.