An artfully conceived and constructed little package of movement, poignancy and an inevitable end. You packed all the dizzying, unstoppable, astounding drama into four lines: four steps, cunningly balanced and on fire. Amazing stuff! Loving it!
The way the poem is formatted on the screen looks like waves of that endless marching, reaching further and further toward the goal stated in the last line. This reminds me of some of the ancient Greek poems that were shaped like altars, or flower vases, or other objects. You have written an excellent poem with a great format.
An artfully conceived and
An artfully conceived and constructed little package of movement, poignancy and an inevitable end. You packed all the dizzying, unstoppable, astounding drama into four lines: four steps, cunningly balanced and on fire. Amazing stuff! Loving it!
The way the poem is formatted
The way the poem is formatted on the screen looks like waves of that endless marching, reaching further and further toward the goal stated in the last line. This reminds me of some of the ancient Greek poems that were shaped like altars, or flower vases, or other objects. You have written an excellent poem with a great format.
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