Silence arise in the beam of full moon
Let the earth feel the cup of your hand,
Which blows a ricochet in the dark
Rebounding to imprint footsteps
In the cold, wishy-washy creek
Sending thoughts of mesmeric forms
Iridescent pearls are viewed in many forms
As stars come alive adding glitters to the moon
Reflection is seen moving slowly on the creek
Watching itself frolic into the water with hands
Stroking parched petals of calm footsteps
And the ricochet ebbs in the dark
Grasses stood lively in emerald dark
Wild flowers casting shadows of mirthful forms
A relief, a knead on the blooms' footsteps
Teasing the brilliance of the moon
Till a tickling sense of immortal hands
Creates rhymes and flows abounding the creek
The azure sizzles spangles, daring the creek
Lightning form streaks of glare in the dark
As it continuous to open its hands
For a more thunderous strikes; forming
Concealment to subjugate the moon
And silence is replaced with racket footsteps
Leaves yield at the propel of the gust and rain’s footsteps
Are the rhythm that moves the creek
The clouds gather to cover the body of the moon
To stall it’s shine and douse the darkness.
Creating an orchestra to nature’s serene forms
Putting humanity in deep lethargic hands
It’s past 12:00 in the morning, the hands
Of time is turning up, dawn’s footsteps
Are felt through the cold misty forms
Of the breeze gently lying on the creek
A gleam shall rise setting the darkness
Aside, giving earth another kind of shiny moon
The moon shall take a break; the sun's footsteps
are at hand and shall swathe the creek
Of interim darkness with another dazzling form
great work
on this one :*) .
You just don't know how you made my day by critiquing this particular poem. Sestina is, I think, the hardest type of poem to pen. And I didn't know if this one passes a true poet's taste. I guess I pass coz I have your very kind comment :-). Thank you so much. I am now inspired to make another one or even more. :-)
Best regards.
PERFECT! I give a 100+ on this one...
you've pass - Now you can move on the
writing another wonderful Sestina.
I love the lines:
"It’s past 12:00 in the morning, the hands
Of time is turning up, dawn’s footsteps"
Your poem is both beautiful and brilliant.
~ Your Friend and Poet