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erotic/ mature content Sweet fingers over supple skin
smoothing and soothing
a days worth of stress.
An indecent display of yielding
under the intense focus of my frame.
Love and lusted, I feel in your hands
tremulous teasing manipulation
of my evening massage.
The excitement not vehement,
Not yet.
But slow it builds an empire,
for my enamor, mi amore.
Ever so susceptible to a suggestion,
his wolfish nature, his concentration
my rushing tyro tyrant trapped
in the thoughts of
my evening massage.
Hi I am so sorry for being so lame, but can you please tell me how to get a poem into the area that is being Critiqued. I would like to add a poem or two for discussion. Thank you sweeetie
Very nice. The word play is just right so you can get a view of what is being said but with out being vulger. And using the spanish language which in it's self is a sexy language just makes it all the more felt. I enjoyed that
I have a half affinity for erotic poems. Because unlike other poetic themes, when an erotic poems is good, it's very very good, and when it's bad, it's AWFUL! You can throw in as many sexy words as you want, but if you cant string it all together with an erotic poetic sensibility, your screwed. Or not, as the case may be ;-).
So, i take great please in saying, this poem is wonderfull. Fantastic use of language, wonderfull flow, great pace and very very VERY sensual. I am now very very VERY horny. Damn you. ;-)
your game works! great job on this poem! (big words are cool) :)