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Burn
I’m hurting inside
And symbolized by my tears
Are my insecurities, doubts,
Issues and fears
I was completely transformed
Into a different type of man
It put me outside of my norm
And I hope you can understand
Still doesn’t justify my actions
Damn I feel so much shame
Have your feelings for me reduced to mere Fractions?
If so I’m the one to blame
My stupidity has simply pushed you away
Being selfish, scared and inconsiderate
Please believe my words when I say, today
I’m getting rid of all that shit.
Figure things out I’ll back down and give you space
Like Ushers’ song says I’ll just have to let it burn
Feelings won’t change, in my heart and mind will remain your place
And I’ll pray and hope that one day you'll return.
Kevin:
Wow! I just found your poem and it's packed full of great emotion. It reminded me of the song "So It Goes" by Billy Joel. I love the line ~
"Still doesn’t justify my actions"
I feel as though you write your words understanding that you are human, understanding that no justification stands, but still apologizing. Admitting the fault. I feel like not a lot of people are strong enough to say things like that, and I commend you posting this piece for us all to read.
One thing I noticed is that the tempo/beat of the piece changes about halfway through. It feels as though you have a steady rhythm in the first half or quarter, and then you switch into another. It's good though, because it catches the reader off guard, makes them pay more attention, rather than falling into something repetitive.
Great work!
--*kelsi*--
hmmmmmm....