In that moment

in that moment 

when i think of you

my sadness slips away

in that moment 

be it short or long

i feel surrounded by love

in that moment

when the day has been to long

you make me smile

in that moment 

when all hope is lost 

you hand it back to me

in that moment 

when everything is dark

you bring in the light

in that moment 

when i say "I'm fine" 

you are the only one to ask what's wrong

in that moment

when  don't say it but i need to hear it

the words i love you comes out of you so strong. 

in that moment 

when I'm weak,  i turn to you 

to find a way to be strong 

Author's Notes/Comments: 

4-25-2013

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AquarianMale's picture

  I shy away from commenting

 

I shy away from commenting on poetry that leaves a residue of rhyme spinning in my head. Thus this one and “Never Again,” are my favorites from what you have posted. Personally this pillar of a poem was delightful and extremely pleasing to the mind’s eye. It is a superb example of what “I think” appears to be your most dominant and creative style.  I loved the emotive breakthrough, passion, and expressiveness that pour out of you in this piece.  It is a captivating read. If there is anything impassive here, I would say it has to be using the word - long Xs two, and also strong Xs two. Also, line eight should read: too long, rather than: to long. Still, a very enjoyable read. Thank you for posting.

 

impyshideout's picture

Nice.

Nice.

Mardigan's picture

Simple and true, good write!

Simple and true, good write!