toxic relations

Two excerpts from a novel I am writing. Feedback perhaps?

Author's Notes/Comments: 

This is about the relationship between step brother and sister, the sister who has trouble with herself and suffers from body dysmorphia. 

I am writing this to explain the ways that this sickness affects relationships, and the psychological aspect behind falling in love with someone who looks at you like a child as opposed to a beautiful woman. 

I am writing this from my own perspective because the female character in this book is what I am.

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