When love starts to die, it begins with a kiss.

 

The mouth is a poison. 

He said: 

"I love you" 

She felt her frame loose ground. 

INTOXICATED. 

"I miss you" 

Her heart became rapid. 

EXPEDITIOUS. 

"You're the only one" 

Veins were molten within her body. 

INTENSITY. 

"It was a mistake" 

Eyes were a diamond infested field. 

WHIMPER. 

"I swear this time, it'll never happen again" 

Her warmth became cold. 

GELID. 

"Please baby, I never meant to hurt you" 

Looking out windows a reflection of a bruised face. 

BLEMISH. 

"Don't leave me" 

Her affections had become dead. 

BURIED, 

because when love starts to die, 

it begins with a kiss, 

and a heart becomes guarded behind a high chain linked fence, 

where only a little could get through so she is able to live, 

but not enough to give a shit, 

because she was afraid to give in. 

She said:

"The mouth is a poison.."

 
Author's Notes/Comments: 

This was inspired from HIM's song: When love starts to die. 

 

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Astral_Tides's picture

I like the format, first and

I like the format, first and foremost.

It's different, unique.

A triad of sorts.

So few could pull this off in propper depths for it to speak rich enough to sustain the concepts and meanings.

But a few lines happen, and so much was said.

I particularly find multi-verse in the line "Eyes were a diamond infested field."

I see this as potentially 3 distinct blossoms, and yet they also work together in the same fascet.

You, and your words, they are one of a kind ashes.

Something ethreal and more.

So happy to see you sharing them once again.

 


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ashes_twisted's picture

Aw,

Thank you very much Astral!

I've been away for awhile,

but I'm trying to work my way back around. 

(^.-)

Thank you for keeping in touch, 

and your words, as always, are a beauty to look upon. 


"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo

lupus's picture

The headline of yours in

The headline of yours in particular i relate to very well sadly. Nonetheless, a beautiful write.

ashes_twisted's picture

Love kills slowly,

for it is our lover, 

as well as our enemy. 

 

Thank you Lupus,

and I hope things get better for you.

 


"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo

nightlight1220's picture

This is pure

This is pure "ashes_twisted".... you are beautiful. Bold, daring, ugly, beauty in words. 

"I swallowed an 'f' once, and it turned into fate. I chew slower now." 

;-)

.....


...and he asked her, "do you write poetry? Because I feel as if I am the ink that flows from your quill."

"No", she replied, "but I have experienced it. "

 

ashes_twisted's picture

Love your quote. (^.-)

Thank you so much nightlight~!!

<333 

You're too kind. 

*Hugs*


"We are, Each of us angels with only one wing, and we can only fly by embracing one another." -Luciano De Crescenzo