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Four months today
Im a sucker for cheesy movies
and a believer in love
a dense rain rinsed those two months
it could have been two more today
but of course i screwed things up
a dense rain leaving my face anytime i wish i could have changed
id like to tell you i miss you
i am angered towards myself
agile i will have to be
i will have to forget my coveted future
im daunted of yet another
ill be peripatetic wondering pondering thoughts of things
im in a polarized state
i miss you thou i will not say
my anger surpassed only toward myself
i can not blame a heart i gave away
although this pain retribution to whats left of you
This is on the bones level
This is on the bones level beautiful, there's a few things that need a little editing like daunting to daunted to read a little better, and 'anger surpassed only to-ward- myself'
Love the theme and the structure and some great words in there too! I hope you don't mind, it was too beautiful a poem not to say. cheers SS
Don't let any one shake your dream stars from your eyes, lest your soul Come away with them! -SS
"Well, it's love, but not as we know it."
oh why thank you ^-^ I'll be
oh why thank you ^-^ I'll be sure to edit the careless mistakes you brought up and yet again thanks for your words