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Burderned
Spent most of my life, trapped in the dark
Chasing some sort of light, mindset so stark
I go deep into the darkness, all consumed
But somehow I emerge, hope renewed
It happens every time, like it's a game
Every day wondering, is this my last play
Focused mindset, clouded by negativity
Hoping, praying, for a moment of serendipity
This light that I'm chasing, it seems to fade
The edges of my sanity, they seem so frayed..
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for a first poem that isn't so bad, its got good flow, and unlike most first poems which ryhme the rhymes don't feel forced, they seem to come naturally in the way the sentence is structured, I think if you wrote more and put in your 10,000 hours or whatever you might shock yourself :)
Much Love
Ashley
Just one tiny typographical mistake otherwise...........
it's lovely honest and pure.
Ever day wondering, is this my last play<--- there should be a y at the end of ever as I believe that is what you were intending to type. Keep sharing your poems. If you like writing then write. Try writing something non rhyming just let your thoughts fly free of rhyme. I think you will amaze yourself if you give that a try. Most sincerely, Melissa Lundeen.
Never noticed that. Thanks a
Never noticed that. Thanks a lot.
I am dead. I am undead. I am invisible but I will not go away.